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When the summer was well at its height
and I couldn’t sleep cause of my heat
it was then that I saw the three moons.
Oh, the first was as bright as can be
and the second as red as red wine
on this hot twenty-second of June’s.
But the third was the brightest of all
as it shone on my love’s golden hair
and the owl cried its spooky night tunes.
She was dancing around in her sleep
and left home by the open front door
so I followed her into the dunes.
There, I witnessed a wonderful sight
as the moon eclipse came to a close
and I heard the most beautiful tunes.
My love’s gown vanished into the light
of the stars that rained down from above
on this hot twenty-second of June’s.
She just kept dancing all through the night
never noticing me as I watched
till she made her way back through the dunes.
Next morning, I got up in silence
to make sure I would not break her spell.
When she finally woke up at noon’s
she shone brighter than ever before.
I will never forget what I saw,
how she danced on the night of three moons.
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This is wonderful, and it definitely seems complete now. It reads like a beautiful song, Peter, I greatly enjoyed it!
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Thanks! If you know a composer, he or she will be welcome!
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Well done! I knew you could do it. A real ballad.
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Thanks, Jane! If anyone is ever willing to set it to music I shall be happy to sing and record it.
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I wish I knew a few composers.
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Beautiful! A ballad, and it’s like an old legend, too.
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Thanks, Merril! I like a bit of mystery history.
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Excellent!
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Thanks a lot, Riv!
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Brilliant poem!
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Very well done, Peter! A great elusive dream!
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Evocative! Nicely done.
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Enchanting, Peter – a vision one would not soon forget!
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Your poem has a great rhythm and rhyme scheme, Peter, and has all the elements of a good song. I like the way you set the scene succinctly and go straight into the story of the three moons. It reminds me of The Twelve Dancing Princesses, published in Grimm’s Fairy Tales.
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Very sensual and romantic Peter. 🙂✌🏼
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What a wonderful dream… unfortunately we always wake up
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This is absolutely stunning both in words and image! 💘💘💘
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Truly mesmerizing as you tell it. The dream-like quality is magical here.
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What a magic night, it sounds like a fairytale moment.
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This is a wonderful poem but for me, it doesn’t fit the prompt at all. The prompt is to take us on a walk with your poem. You’ve told a wonderful tale about a dream. Perhaps this would be best posted on a Thursday’s Open Link Night? Am I wrong? Is this taking us on a walk?
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She was dancing around in her sleep
and left home by the open front door
so I followed her into the dunes.
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fantastic rhythm to this piece 🙌
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Peter: I’ve thought about this a bit more. This is an old poem you’ve reposted which is apparent from the many replies previous to posting it today. It is not taking us on a walk. The prompt indicates “Take us on a walk through one specific place.” It mentions for example, a neighborhood, a market, a garden….Your poem, while beautiful, does not fit the prompt. I’m so sorry, but I’ll have to delete it from Mr. Linky. You are such an excellent writer, I do hope you’ll write a new poem that does indeed take us on a walk – you have such a way with words.
lillian
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A magical response to the theme of dance. I was mesmerized by the mystery of it all. I wished for it to be true. A dance under three moons would be more enchanting than my restless sleep.
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A beautifully written poem, Peter.
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Loved this, Peter!
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This is magical, Peter.
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